Hey Omar i figured i might read your short story for homework 25.
To start off I really enjoyed your story. I thought it was interesting and original. I thought it was great how your stories true cool guy was the Jim, the one who kept the peace and just wanted to have a good time with his friends. I was not surprised to see the cool and main character guy be Jim, the likable.
COMMENT ON ALICIAS STORY
hi Alicia. let me just start by saying this is one of the best stories i have read. I really enjoyed reading it. i really liked how you were able to show a contrast between what you saw as cool, nate a nice person who appreciated art and culture. and what is typically shown as cool, veronica, an arrogant, and mean girl who does the same thing all the time. not really experiencing life. I think it was a good way to depict the "real" cool and the "fake" cool.
COMMENT ON BRITTANI'S STORY
Hi brittani this is a good story with an interesting plot.
I really enjoyed how you demonstrated the idea that cool people in our world, are cute, and wear new clothes. Your quote at the end where you said that dayshawn is cool yet not stuck up was a good way to introduce some of your own ideas about cool. Many people are seen as cool if they look down on others, and act arrogant but your story showed that is not necessarily the case.
COMMENT ON MAX'S STORY
hi max i thought i would comment on your post.
for one this story is unique. it takes on a perspective unlike the others i have seen. your character faces an emotional conflict different from the other conflicts that are physical, tangible, and about high school. another thing i found interesting about this story was that it was that the cool guy, Pascal, was seen on both sides of the spectrum. in one aspect he was extremely intelligent and did wonderfully in school not your average cool, and on the other hand he went to parties and drinks. the contrast was very interesting.
for one this story is unique. it takes on a perspective unlike the others i have seen. your character faces an emotional conflict different from the other conflicts that are physical, tangible, and about high school. another thing i found interesting about this story was that it was that the cool guy, Pascal, was seen on both sides of the spectrum. in one aspect he was extremely intelligent and did wonderfully in school not your average cool, and on the other hand he went to parties and drinks. the contrast was very interesting.
COMMENT ON ARDEN'S STORY
Arden this is a really good story.
to start off your reliance on description and lack of dialogue in the first paragraph greatly helped me see who dakota is. i was able to picture him as he walked by and the people saying hello. secondly one thing you did in your story that i have not seen in any others is how "cool" changed. at first it was Dakota, a nice guy who treated others with respect. then it changed to hawk, an arrogant, smug, hot shot. the idea of involving two different defintions of cool is something i have been noticing in some other stories. it was like this high school was in its own world, hawk was societies definition of cool , and he got the high school to conform
to start off your reliance on description and lack of dialogue in the first paragraph greatly helped me see who dakota is. i was able to picture him as he walked by and the people saying hello. secondly one thing you did in your story that i have not seen in any others is how "cool" changed. at first it was Dakota, a nice guy who treated others with respect. then it changed to hawk, an arrogant, smug, hot shot. the idea of involving two different defintions of cool is something i have been noticing in some other stories. it was like this high school was in its own world, hawk was societies definition of cool , and he got the high school to conform
PART 2
One thing that i saw in almost all of the stories i read was the involvement of the writers definition of cool, and societies definition of cool. Arden's, max's, and alicia's stories all incorporated an idea or message of what should be cool and what is cool. This added to a general feeling, and theme i got from reading and hearing different stories of what is wrong with our definition of cool.
the stories, max's and alicia's especially showed a recurring theme of independence. Not quite a rebel, or artist. more of a mix between the mystic and sage. they were sage's because they were wise and had these ideas and opinions about others that were largely oblivious to the other characters.
Popularity played a role in every single story i read, which was no surprise to me especially because they were based on high school. In all the stories there was this idea or topic of likability. whether it was the character losing it, it ardens story, the character being worried about gaining it in brittani's story, or Pascal not really caring what his classmates thought in max's story. popularity or lack there of was seen constantly. proving that popularity is a central part of being seen as cool. Some social circles see cool as not having popularity by the general population. while others require popularity to be cool. regardless of having or wanting it or not popularity plays a pivotal role in our interpretation of cool.
Another recurring theme i noticed while reading the stories was the constant bring up of approval. for instance in Brittani's story the main character was worried about getting approval from his new classmates. In the beginning of Arden's story people were always saying hello to him or at least nodding there heads because they wanted the cool guys approval. even the rebel gets approval. Not from the authoritative figures but from the regular people who want to be like them.
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